Baron Evaluations - Revision history

Lucius at 11:10, 25 January 2018

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Zyindra: /* Adventurer's Log */

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Lucius at 02:13, 21 January 2018

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Zyindra: /* Adventurer's Log */

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Zyindra: /* Adventurer's Log */

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Lucius at 02:32, 21 December 2017

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Zyindra: /* Adventurer's Log */

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Lucius at 02:32, 16 December 2017

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Zyindra: /* Adventurer's Log */

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Lucius: /* Adventurer's Log */

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 "So too, it is not as if you are ensconced in a palace." Zyindra shrugs. "We go out and explore this land. And you with us. I daresay you have years of such explorations still ahead, before things could even begin to get so formalized and finished. Hopefully by the time all of that is done, you will feel more ready to settle down and stay in one place, and find the adventures of your spirit in what you can build."
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 He turns back to Zyindra again. "I know I've protested my assignment as the Baron of Fao. When I arrived at Borderpoint, when we met for the first time, I expected the beginning of years traveling throughout Krystallos for the company. I was looking forward to the freedom it would give me while still serving their needs. This assignment has changed all of that. But even though I would gladly give up this position, I know it's important and I know I need to succeed."
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 "You are here, working daily to improve what you can in this place, and to build a future homeland for your own people and all those who might seek refuge here. And that lies beyond actually worrying over how to prevent the furtherance of the devastation visited upon Krystallos' lands and peoples by the Invaders."
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 He turns to face Zyindra. "I'm sure you saw the margin note next to the books in the ledger. Ever since I saw them, I can't get the words out of my mind. It's silly really. Why would I even care what he thinks? Or what anyone thinks?"
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-Zyindra glances at Lucius once more, and then away as they finish assembling the meal. "Of course I saw the notes. But I thought little of them." Which sounds dismissive, and is to some extent. But it is not meant to be dismissive of her friend's emotions, as she clarifies momentarily. "I believe he was honestly expressing a hope, generated from literally hundreds of years of his own observations, that you might prove a better baron than the dozen or so absentee landlords who had come before, who cared nothing for this place, the people, or the betterment of these lands. And I should venture to say that you have already proven far better than all of those who came before. You are here, working daily to improve what you can in this place, and to build a future homeland for your own people and all those who might seek refuge here. And that lies beyond actually worrying over how to prevent the furtherance of the devastation visited upon Krystallos' lands and peoples by the Invaders."
+Zyindra glances at Lucius once more, and then away as they finish assembling the meal. "Of course I saw the notes. But I thought little of them." Which sounds dismissive, and is to some extent. But it is not meant to be dismissive of her friend's emotions, as she clarifies momentarily.
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 He turns to face Zyindra. "I'm sure you saw the margin note next to the books in the ledger. Ever since I saw them, I can't get the words out of my mind. It's silly really. Why would I even care what he thinks? Or what anyone thinks?"
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 "I do not believe we are treating you vastly differently. I surely hope not." Zyindra answers at last. "Our mode of address may have changed, especially in front of others." Calling him the Baron, of course. "But that is only our effort - clumsy, perhaps - to reinforce your authority and support you in the eyes of others who do not know you as we do."
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 "I guess I don't feel like I've changed. The burden of the Barony isn't much different than the burden of my family. It's not exactly where I thought I would be but it's not dissimilar either. Sometimes I sense that my friends are treating me like I'm vastly different than what I was. Of course I didn't really expect to have any real friends, so I suppose that's different." As he talks, Lucius counts and recounts the silverware, stops and then starts again as he continues to talk. "You know, Olivin had collected books that my father had written."
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 She considers him for a bit after his question, perhaps mulling over the right thing to say or way to say it. "Haven't we all changed, at least a bit?" she first says, smiling. "I feel we all have, at least a bit. But I still see the person - my friend - that I knew, despite any changes. What there has been has been minor, and largely induced simply by the responsibilities thrust upon you. And their weight."
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 Zyindra finally decides it is time, and removes the meat from the stove's heat, covering the container to keep the moisture and heat in. She does the same with the veggies, and then starts assembling plates. "That is what I have found so far. Not terribly helpful, I know. I am sorry."
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-Lucius gets up from his seat and takes the plates from Zyindra, standing in front of her making sure he has her full attention.
+Lucius gets up from his seat and takes the plates from Zyindra, standing in front of her and making sure he has her full attention.
-"Don't be sorry," He starts, hesitating a moment as his gaze rests upon Zyindra. A swirl of emotions reflect in his face: uncertainty, sadness, love, anxiousness, determination. It ends with a stubborn, pleading insistance "You are not a servant or a child. You do not take orders from me and everything you do is a welcome kindness."
+"Don't be sorry," He starts, hesitating a moment as his gaze rests upon Zyindra. A swirl of emotions reflect in his face: uncertainty, sadness, love, anxiousness, determination. It ends with a stubborn, pleading insistence "You are not a servant or a child. You do not take orders from me and everything you do is a welcome kindness."
-He fiddles with the plates like a nervous boy talking to a girl for the first time his question skews from anything that might've been expected he would say next. "Do you think I've changed?"
+He fiddles with the plates like a nervous boy talking to a girl for the first time; his question skews from anything that might've been expected he would say next. "Do you think I've changed?"
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